Editing challenge

Here are the responses from the presentation in class earlier this afternoon. Take up the challenge to edit any of the sentences.

Characters (Mas Selamat) – Group Response

Student’s Answer	Edited Answer
(Wayne) This one is Mas Selamat. His hair is pirate. The eyes is very small. He has black beard. He wear pirate dressing and his right eye is blocked. He has a bullet shot on his right leg.	This is Mas Selamat. He is wearing a pirate’s hat. His eyes are very small. He is wearing a pirate’s dress and wearing a pirate patch on his right eye. He has a gunshot wound on his right leg.
(Irfan) His name is Selamat B Hari Raya He has muscular body. He has shoulder length hair He has sharp eyes His complexion have pimples He has brown skin He has no scars He is wearing girl dresses He is limp legs
(Mingmin) Masi Lemak He has fat body He has curly and red hair He has straight eyes He has brown face He has burn scars on his right face He has dangerous looking
(Aman) Osamalina Muscular body Hair blonde Narrow eyes and thick bushy eyebrows Black colour skin A pointing chin Freckle face No scars Dress, hairband Dangerous, afraid, popular, rude, hateful and old
Mastak Selamat White hair Dark eyebrows Yellow and smooth complexion A pointed chin Hairband, dress Dressing accessory skirt Walk with one leg
(Harris) Mas Selamat Down Well-built Curly hair Sharp eyes Brown skin Neatly trimmed beard Lightning scar Bespectacled Bad, dishonest, evil, rude and strange
(Hong Ying) His name is Mas Selamat Build is muscular Hair is curly hair Eyes is small eyes Complexion yellow and brown skin Round face He don’t have pimples He dress skirt Character traits brave
(Sarah) His name is Mas Selamat He is medium built His hair is afro hairstyle His complexion is dark brown skin He has none scars He is dangerous looking
(Firdaus) His name is Mas Selamat B Kastari His hair is afro His complexion is smooth and light brown
(Amelia) His name is Mas Selamat His hair is afro He has thick moustache and beard He is silly and rough
(Chin Liang) Name Mas Selamat Err…beard normal size Aaaa…Hair black Eerr…the the skjn brown Err…facial feature none Scars none He has a pirate hat and pirate patch Character traits fighter

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